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Half the time I just write whatever I feel I have one where I was so heart broken and needed something to say. Here lemme just……
* WHAT IS LOVE?
what is love really…to me its something that someone uses until worn out like a candle with a small fuse…it goes out quicker than someone's life…making them feel as if no one knows how to control that little fire before it goes out……its something that everyone thinks they know they have until nothing is there…only but loneliness who meets you at every turn…its as easy to find as
hope…but its hard to find it if there is none……its that one diamond in the rough that can’t be found , only is a mirage , seen but never real……But soon there is the answer to the SOS sent out and ive been found…a new life…but within it are the choices that can turn into a wild fire if not handled right…it could be a disaster…it could be your own gravestone carved with only the words that haunt you “you’re not good enough”, “you don’t deserve to be loved”…it haunts you until you become a lost soul never knowing what you’re truly looking for, and once you find it, either someone has it or its already been too late, cause you’re only a memory of something that couldn’t be…something that couldn’t be found, something that is found but can’t have or even touch, or even feel……its like the black hole sucking in anything that seems happy or even lovable and takes it away forever, leaving you as alone as the one constellation that was never named and left alone as another pair of stars in the universe*

Enjoy~

@furetakunai ac_unit

It's amazing how much a struggled to read this due to the bold. But I'm sure that's just a me thing.
Anywhoodle, I liked it, Bee. The symbolism was good, especially at the end with this line:

leaving you as alone as the one constellation that was never named and left alone as another pair of stars in the universe

That line was my favourite. Awesome job, keep up the beautiful work.

@furetakunai ac_unit

(I decided to just post the thing now and run hahah)

"Saturday"

I love you, I love you
you're the broken glass to the wine
the liquid slips between the cracks
one and two drops at a time.

My hands stain red with the glass
the carpet turns red with a splash
I cry, and I cry on the scene of the crime
and tears fall from my eyes with a single painted lash.

Please don't leave me with this
please don't, please don't call my name in vain
and bring me to your bedside
just so I can leave peonies by your name.

Tie-dyed dresses and false memories
of us spinning slowly through the city park
and you held me close, told me you loved me.
In truth, I was always alone; dancing in the dark.

The liquid slips between the cracks
and tears fall from my eyes with a single painted lash.
One and two drops at a time.

@furetakunai ac_unit

Aaaaa….my brain doesn't know how to process giving feedback on things that I like. But, I love your syntax and use of line breaks as well as indentation. Gives it,,, you know,, the ~aesthetic~
I'm probably making no fucking sense

@furetakunai ac_unit

"Moonlight Macabre"

By the horizon line, dusk turns to dawn.
And even as the lights die down, the parties rage on.
Lovers share kisses under the moonlight as the stars
stand right in front of them. And lonely birds go back to rest
upon treetops that caress them like death once had so gently.
Their tweets and chirps ring out in the lonely hollows.
They cry and hold themselves in the ghosts of their lovers' wings.
Sad birds weep, they always do
underneath the moonlight where they were out-shined.
But sad birds still sing.

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the imagery, wow. first thing i noticed— the nail polish coming off; is that like a metaphor for moving away from the idea of femininity? how you've composed the almost ?remorseful glimpse into the sun-drunk past, visions before the arising; the becoming. i thought about it all day.

@furetakunai ac_unit

You did a great job with the prompt! I'm no good at giving detailed compliments about poetry because my brain always konks out and tells me I'm stupid. But if I could I certainly would.
And with that said I was going to post here but have most definitely decided against it now.

@belle-elaine

I'm sorry…
I'm not who I said I was
I'm sorry…
That I led you on
I'm sorry…
The happy, bright, wonderful, laughing version of me you got to see every day
wasn't real… I know how badly you wanted it to be
I mean
I did too

@darling-velocipede group

You did a great job with the prompt! I'm no good at giving detailed compliments about poetry because my brain always konks out and tells me I'm stupid. But if I could I certainly would.
And with that said I was going to post here but have most definitely decided against it now.

n o?? pls post what you were going to i want to seee >:(