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@Celestial-Burst, I think I can get one done for right now, So I'll do the first on the list; Forest!

  • Height/Weight: 5'5"5? Do you mean like… five foot, five inches, five centimeters? Or was that a typo? Also, I'm assuming you meant 130 pounds, but you didn't specify, so I'd make sure you double checked that.

  • Flaws: Sounds like he has Anxiety a bit. I'd say what that is in the Flaws.

  • Personality: Reading it, I'm not quite sure how he expresses emotions. It doesn't seem entirely clear (to me that is), and you never specifically say he hides it, so I'd mention something about it at least ;)

  • Conditions: I kind of, uh, have experience with the part about everything being perfect, and that seems rather accurate to me. Though I'd mention, that for his personality if you do mention his emotions, he bottles them up and hides them from people. Telling them he's perfectly fine, and when he's alone, that's when he lets it all out. Totally not from personal experience. But each person is different, so that's up to you. I'd just like to mention they expect for themselves to be perfectly fine, and everyone else's life is perfect except for their own. So they hide it behind closed doors. Overall, great job!

  • Religion: So he believes there is something out there, but doesn't know what, so he doesn't commit himself? I like that, that's good!

I think he's really good otherwise! I have an additional notes rq. I see you used some of the tips from the last critique I gave you! Lol that's it! I love him, and again the character art! I hope I helped you out, and wish you happy developing!

@Rainy_day_artist_classic group

Alright, time for Fern @Celestial-Burst!

  • Personality: I hate to keep saying this, but I still don't know how she displays emotions exactly. I can picture some, a little better than before, but it's still a little hazy.

  • Prejudices: Maybe she could be against the negative, rude people. She tries to like them, and be sweet, but they just irk her to no end.

  • Conditions: Yes. You basically described me, maybe I'm Fern? But yeah, sounds really good! Just something I'm gonna mention, even when doing something she enjoys, does she get distracted? Can anything help her focus? Will she loose her sense of time, going off to do something when she doesn't have the time for it?

  • Occupation: Yeah, that for sure counts. That can be a lot of work!

  • Family: Two itsy bitsy things. Does she name any of the birds or have favorites? And, I see you're working still on her parents, but you mentioned her siblings a few times, is there anywhere you could put their names or anything down?

I think that's all! You're doing awesome with your characters! I love them a lot! I hope I helped you out, and wish you happy developing!

@Rainy_day_artist_classic group

@salami011 let's take a look shall we?

  • General Note: Lol, I love how his role is Edgelord. But what is his place in the story? Is he your MC, or protagonist? Or is he something else?

  • Eyes: Trying to decide what color grey, do you mean like a light grey, or a darker grey? Just a suggestion, but maybe put a more specific grey in there.

  • Body Type: Well, thin isn't much of a body type persay. I'd give a little more description, just so you have a better idea. Is he lanky? Again, being descriptive would be great!

  • Nature Section: You seem to have a dead link? Or maybe it's just locked, idk. Mannerisms, does he do anything like knee bouncing or nail biting? What you have is great, but you can always add more! Same goes for flaws, you can always add more!

  • Favorites: I tell this to people on the daily, why are his favorites his favorites? Give him a reason to like the color purple, or why he likes kinves so much.

  • Background: He doesn't have one, which I understand if you're working on it, but I'd for sure get something up at some point!

I believe that's all! Happy developing!

@Celestial-Burst

Alright, time for Fern @Celestial-Burst!

  • Personality: I hate to keep saying this, but I still don't know how she displays emotions exactly. I can picture some, a little better than before, but it's still a little hazy.

  • Prejudices: Maybe she could be against the negative, rude people. She tries to like them, and be sweet, but they just irk her to no end.

  • Conditions: Yes. You basically described me, maybe I'm Fern? But yeah, sounds really good! Just something I'm gonna mention, even when doing something she enjoys, does she get distracted? Can anything help her focus? Will she loose her sense of time, going off to do something when she doesn't have the time for it?

  • Occupation: Yeah, that for sure counts. That can be a lot of work!

  • Family: Two itsy bitsy things. Does she name any of the birds or have favorites? And, I see you're working still on her parents, but you mentioned her siblings a few times, is there anywhere you could put their names or anything down?

I think that's all! You're doing awesome with your characters! I love them a lot! I hope I helped you out, and wish you happy developing!

Thank you so much! You always give lovely tips and critiques! They definitely help!

@Rainy_day_artist_classic group

Dylanger Clyde:

  • Height/Weight: I see you're unsure still, though I personally see him around like 5'7'' so for weight probably around 135lbs. But it's your character! So of course that's your decision!

  • Race: You don't even seem to mention what he is specifically. If he's suppose to be human, than I'd suggest adding his human race. It helps you to expand on his culture.

  • Looks overall: They seem great! Though adding detail to the different fields would be great!

  • Conditions: Looks good! Especially with background reasoning!

  • Personality: Super cute! I love that! Though I'd suggest explaining his take on emotions, like is he very verbal or actionesc with them?

  • Social Question: How well does he get along with grownups? You say a few times he gets along with kids, but can he cope with grown up people? Or does he find it difficult because he was bullied by people older than him so he doesn't trust them?

  • Favorites Hey~ So, I think I've said this before (Maybe?) But giving reasons why their favorite things are there favorites would be cool, and help develop the character!

  • Education: Because I've already used Personality XD but yeah, I wanted to mention that you mentioned he was a try everything kind of guy. You could totally put that with his personality, that he's super willing to try something new!

I think that's all I have for you! Happy developing!