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@amber_is_in_a_loop

Right sorry ^^'
Name:
Age:
Sexuality:
Gender:
Planet type:
Appearance/outfit(keeping in mind the characteristics of their planet):
Personality:
Fears:
Strengths:
Weaknesses:
Family/background (optional):
Other (optional):

@MusicElle-is-here

it's fine
Name: Holly Stevens
Age: 16
Sexuality: pan
Gender: female
Planet type: Saturn
Appearance/outfit(keeping in mind the characteristics of their planet): Fair skin, blonde hair, dark gray eyes, lots of freckles. She's average height with an athletic build. She normally wears a hoodie and leggings or a t-shirt and jeans with sneakers.
Personality: Friendly, kind, and happy-go-lucky. Holly likes making friends and is a good leader.
Fears: being alone or unwanted
Strengths: social skills, leadership, lots of control of her abilities
Weaknesses: she doesn't work well by herself, insecure, easily jealous
Family/background (optional): it will be revealed throughout the story (aka I can't come up with anything rn)
Other (optional):

@amber_is_in_a_loop

Name: Lucie Turner
Age: 15
Sexuality: Lesbian
Gender: Female
Planet type: Pluto
Appearance/outfit(keeping in mind the characteristics of their planet): Ocre streaked blue very smooth and straight (always down) hair, beige/green eyes, 5'5, thin and fragile frame, very tanned, sharp and hollowed out features, usually wears a simple long sleeve fitted grey dress with black torn tights and black work boots
Personality: selfless, unblinkingly prioritizes anyone and everyone over herself, quiet, efficient, sweet and caring in quite a motherly way, extremely trustworthy, street smart and resourceful, down to earth and not scared of the truth
Fears: failure and blame, death
Strengths: extremely fast and fast reflexes, quite a good hand to hand fighter, skilled liar and thief, can easily power through pain, hunger, heat and cold
Weaknesses: the twins (see family), very powerful but her powers are uncontrolled most of the time, not very physically strong, intimidated by the higher ranks, limited education
Family/background (optional): two 7 y/o twin siblings, one boy Soren and one girl Amaya. A nomad family (Lucie, Soren, Amaya, and their mother Gail)
Other (optional): her father Abraham was a Mercury, cast out for marrying a Pluto (her mother) so Lucie can read people's emotions quite well but that's the extent of it

@amber_is_in_a_loop

Ugh wait I just realized the social ranks are doing something weird. Here's the right ranks:

  1. Mercury
  2. Neptune
  3. Saturn
  4. Uranus
  5. Venus
  6. Mars
  7. Jupiter
  8. Earth
  9. Pluto

@MusicElle-is-here

is dystopia too basic? maybe they could go on a quest of some sort, or my character could discover yours, originally planning to turn her in or something like that, but Lucie stops her and they become friends and then eventually more?

@amber_is_in_a_loop

We could do something like a combination of those last two? It makes sense if Lucie is such a low social rank as opposed to Holly. Maybe some sort of political take-down when Holly realizes the condition Lucie's rank lives in?

@amber_is_in_a_loop

Yeah? Good to hear. Here we go!

Lucie crept down an empty alley, hugging the brick wall behind her. She knew there was a small bread stand just around the corner who's owner was partially blind. As much as she knew it was wrong to take advantage of this, they needed to eat.
She got to the end of the alley and found herself facing a crowded cobbled street, bustling with a variety of merchants, performers and pedestrians.
It was perfect cover.

@amber_is_in_a_loop

Lucie avancait sans un bruit dans une allee deserte, longeant de pres le mur de briques decrepites derriere elle. Elle savait deja qu'au coin il y avait un marchand de pain partiellement aveugle. Bien qu'elle savait ca cruel d'en profiter, il lui fallait trouver de quoi manger.
Elle arriva a la fin de l'allee et deboucha sur une rue pavee bondee d'une variete de marchands, artistes et nobles.
Parfait pour se dissimuler.
(I won't do any accents cause I haven't got them on my phone)

@MusicElle-is-here

Holly acheter la nourriture pour sa famille. Sa mère veut elle obtenir de la nourriture. Maintenant elle chercher pour du pain. « Où est la pain? » se dit elle.

@amber_is_in_a_loop

(First of all you didn't conjugate acheter, it would become acheta.
Also obtenir would be conjugated– veut qu'elle obtienne.
Then pour du would simply be le.
The rest is really good though)

@amber_is_in_a_loop

(cool!)
Tres lentement elle sortit de l'ombre de l'allee et a pas de chat s'approcha du marchand de pain. Elle garda la tete basse, et sur son chemin bouscula une Saturne d'a peu pres son age (Holly).
"Desolee!" s'excusa-t-elle respectueusement sans regarder la fille dans les yeux. Elle s'eloigna rapidement de l'etrangere, continuant sur sa route.

@MusicElle-is-here

Holly regardé l’étrangère; elle veut à dit quelque chose, mais elle ne sait pas quoi. « Au revoir? » elle répond, un peu confus. C’est bizarre! Qui est la fille? Holly est très curieuse, alors elle a besoin de savoir.

@amber_is_in_a_loop

(ok so regardé is a conjugation but not the right one in this case. You'd use regarda here cause we're writing in the past tense.
Then elle veuit a dit isn't right either, you can simply say elle veut lui dire. Dire isn't conjugated cause veut already is.
The rest is perfect! You're actually quite good you know, it's just convoluted french conjugation. Also I'm not sure if my explanations make any sense so tell me if you're confused ^^')