Can you provide feedback on this universe please?
Here is the universe:
Here are the 2 main characters (protagonist and antagonist) of the story:
Here are the five layers of the universe:
Here is the link to the obelisk in the universe (described in the notes of the universe):
HAHA I like you description of malcom's favorite animal, I'd like to think it's a hippo because they're one of the most dangerous animals in africa
I think you have a brilliant Idea just write it out and see how it goes I didn't like the fact that malcom's age was different though I feel like he should have stayed thirteen forever.
Okay. Thanks!
I think I would like more elaboration on Malcolm's incident… and more description into the everyday lives of people who live there. I mean I understand the hellish part. You made that very clear. I also like the creatures you came up with, the abominations. I think you have a very nice original idea. I think it does need to be rounded out though. You have bits and pieces of a great universe but it just needs to be filled in.
Thanks, I will try to explain more the general lives of the poeple who live in each part.