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Started March 13, 2018 by Deleted user

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To confirm, each of them has a divine parent. In classic Irish mythology, gods/demigods tend to age faster, both physically and mentally, so Calum's mind at ten would be more like seventeen.

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Here is my child Lucas. Thank you!!

Can you critique him please? I'm not very descriptive so sorry in advance

Thanks in advance!

Hi! You've already looked my character over, but I've made a few changes and I was hoping you could do it again.

(One thing you suggested was to have her not fall into the Batman/Superman trope, and I haven't really mentioned it in the character page, but trust me, she gets mad and hates her pseudo-job at times. The first chapter is basically her complaining about how she always has to bail people out - in nicer terms, of course lol. Her main inspiration for becoming a superhero was her foster mother; she's basically following in her footsteps, and her hero work does take a toll on her social life, so hopefully that fixes the whole trope thing.)

In addition to the one above, can you also look over these three?

Ethan: Ethan Grant
Luke: Luke Steele
Kellan: Kellan Styles