forum Character Critques~ ((Closed))
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@Rainy_day_artist_classic group

@Nie-Huaisang-is-lost-in-the-stars, let's go!

  • Race: Since she's human, what specific human race is she? Is she Japanese, American, British? Just thought I'd put it out there!

  • Body type: Great descriptions! I'd add the shape she is/will be though. I have some cites, I'll list them: https://www.stylecraze.com/articles/different-body-shapes-of-women/, and https://www.123rf.com/photo_70484414_stock-vector-vector-illustration-of-different-body-shape-types-.html

  • Favorites: Guess what? I've said this a dozen times, and keep saying it! I was given this advice, and love it. Give a reason why their favorites are their favorites! It gives them a little more history and fun facts!

  • Occupation: Well, I've been told both Job and Occupation are the same thing (by multiple people), so maybe you should either make them the same, or put both options in both fields, or only fill one of the options.

  • Gallery: I love that pic! Did you draw that? It's super cute!

As you can see, I don't have much to say, she seems pretty good to me! I hope I helped you out some! Happy developing!

@Nie-Huaisang-is-lost-in-the-stars group

@Nie-Huaisang-is-lost-in-the-stars, let's go!

  • Race: Since she's human, what specific human race is she? Is she Japanese, American, British? Just thought I'd put it out there!

  • Body type: Great descriptions! I'd add the shape she is/will be though. I have some cites, I'll list them: https://www.stylecraze.com/articles/different-body-shapes-of-women/, and https://www.123rf.com/photo_70484414_stock-vector-vector-illustration-of-different-body-shape-types-.html

  • Favorites: Guess what? I've said this a dozen times, and keep saying it! I was given this advice, and love it. Give a reason why their favorites are their favorites! It gives them a little more history and fun facts!

  • Occupation: Well, I've been told both Job and Occupation are the same thing (by multiple people), so maybe you should either make them the same, or put both options in both fields, or only fill one of the options.

  • Gallery: I love that pic! Did you draw that? It's super cute!

As you can see, I don't have much to say, she seems pretty good to me! I hope I helped you out some! Happy developing!

Thanks so much, Rainy! <3

@Rainy_day_artist_classic group

@Hungry_And_Tired!

  • Weight: Holy- uh yeah, that's really underweight for a 7'9'' gal. She should probably be about like 210-230 range for weight. At least more than she is, because she is suppose to be slim, so maybe bump it up a few dozen pounds

  • Body type: Again, like for Shea, I'd give a specific type. Like hourglass or pear shaped, something like that, so you have a better/clearer picture in your mind.

  • Mannerisms: Does she have any ticks? Like facial ticks or something? Rolling your eyes, or anything? I'd put down some things she tends to do while talking, or walking, or just in general.

  • Flaws/Prejudices: So I feel these two are rather contradictory. Considering she sees good in everyone. I'd maybe change it to either "most everyone" or "almost everyone" so it fits better.

  • Talents: Positivity? I don't really see this as a talent. But it's up to you if you think it is!

She seems good, though I feel like in general, a little lacking in detail. Just the slightest bit, but I think she's good!

@Oakiin

Hey, would you be willing to critique the idea of a character? I don't have time to make a character sheet, plus I don't know enough about them, but if I described their idea to you, would you critique that?

@Oakiin

Cortz: (Courts)
Cortz is an anatolian shepherd/german shepherd/st. bernard/about everything else mix that lives is Moscow. The end of the world has come, and the city has form a distinct method of survival. Cortz is one of thousands of wild dogs who have been roaming the streets for generations. The dogs have become so feral, they've begun to evolve back into wolves.
The city uses the dogs as protection, and in turn, let the wild dogs seek shelter in their homes.
Cortz is a middle-ranking pack member in a large pack of about 40-50 dogs. He's callous and uncaring, searching only for survival. Hes fairly well-liked in his pack, but not the most popular. He's one of the bigger dogs in the pack, and is tan, black, and has splotchy wolfish markings. He has a longer nose that is more jowly, like a st. bernard, and has the long bushy tail of a german shepherd. Hs ears are half-perked, and he had almond shaped, bronze eyes. Cortz was born into the pack, and as one of the strongest dogs, helps defend their territory from other packs and humans who aren't native to the city.

@Rainy_day_artist_classic group

Cortz: (Courts)
Cortz is an anatolian shepherd/german shepherd/st. bernard/about everything else mix that lives is Moscow. The end of the world has come, and the city has form a distinct method of survival. Cortz is one of thousands of wild dogs who have been roaming the streets for generations. The dogs have become so feral, they've begun to evolve back into wolves.
The city uses the dogs as protection, and in turn, let the wild dogs seek shelter in their homes.
Cortz is a middle-ranking pack member in a large pack of about 40-50 dogs. He's callous and uncaring, searching only for survival. He's fairly well-liked in his pack, but not the most popular. He's one of the bigger dogs in the pack, and is tan, black, and has splotchy wolfish markings. He has a longer nose that is more jowly, like a st. bernard, and has the long bushy tail of a german shepherd. His ears are half-perked, and he had almond shaped, bronze eyes. Cortz was born into the pack, and as one of the strongest dogs, helps defend their territory from other packs and humans who aren't native to the city.

Well, @KHS-SunGod, I seem to be unable to find anything. The only thing, is maybe be just the smallest bit more descriptive on his looks. Maybe give him a weight, so we can get an idea about how big he is! Really that's about it from what I can tell!

@Rainy_day_artist_classic group

AHHHHHHHH @Ash-is-okay-at-manga, OK, I gotchu now!

  • Hair: Two tiny insignificant little details, Hair color, when you say silver strands, do you mean like natural? From the roots or like dyed ends? If you could elaborate on that, that'd be great! And really random, but does she have bangs of any kind? I feel like it could fit wit her sloppy hair cut, but just asking.

  • Body Type: Heh, I've mentioned this to a lot of people Like every person I critiqued but I'd give the character a shape! What specific body type is she? I'll list my most used cites for eg. : https://www.123rf.com/photo_70484414_stock-vector-vector-illustration-of-different-body-shape-types-.html, and https://www.stylecraze.com/articles/different-body-shapes-of-women/

  • Mannerisms: They're good, but you can always add more! I'd suggest having more than one, (For eg. If you did give her bangs, she could always blow them out of her face, but again, that's up to you!) cracking her knuckles, biting on her lip, picking at her skin. Any of that works! Knee bouncing, nail biting, squirming/tapping her foot or finger on a table, any little either nervous or just regular ticks work!

  • Flaws: I'd for sure give her more. Does she mistrust people? Is she mistrusted by people? Does she have no sense of time, causing her to be late me? Is she selfish? She really needs some more, mostly because people have more than one flaw. Look at friends and family maybe, and pick out some you like. This goes for mannerisms too!

  • Nature section: Because I don't want to make a ton of different topics on it anymore, I think just adding more detail in would be great. Having more than one hobby and/or talent. And I don't think that's what alignment is for, I believe you wanted sexuality for that just an fyi ;)

  • Social section: I don't get to know much about her, so I'd for sure add in her favorite things at least! And if you do, I'd give reasons why, you can give her little quirks and things because of it!

  • History: It seems a little lack luster, though you've got a good start! I'd keep working on it, and building it up.

  • Detail: OK, so, I'm really now wondering how many sections I've added to my own characters… did I really add that many? I'd suggest (and if you need help filling out some of the strange ones, come ask!) filling out other field if there are any! But really, that's up to you.

I feel like that was a lot… and I'm sorry, I just found one thing and wanted to make myself clear! I hope I helped you out, happy developing!