forum Character critique? PLZ :))))
Started by @GraceAnn:)
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Biiah2012

hey Gracie!
Well, first things first. I really like your work on Cyrus!
Here are some things I would work on:

  • I think that if you put hard work on his intern conflicts ( like: is he really happy where he is? Is he doing what he is because of someone else? For himself? Does he feel the pressure of a family name? How does he deal with that?)
  • Another thing I would work on are his flaws. In my opinion, in order to be a good character, he has to be believable and most importantly: relatable. So think more about deeper things. for example: what does he fear? Is it approval? Fear of losing battle? Being embarrassed in front of people? Is he to proud? Not trustworthy? etc.

Best of luck :)
I hope this reply was useful in some way

ps: I loved the fact that he is colorblind, but think about how he being colorblind affects him? Or does it affect him at all?

@GraceAnn:)

hey Gracie!
Well, first things first. I really like your work on Cyrus!
Here are some things I would work on:

  • I think that if you put hard work on his intern conflicts ( like: is he really happy where he is? Is he doing what he is because of someone else? For himself? Does he feel the pressure of a family name? How does he deal with that?)
  • Another thing I would work on are his flaws. In my opinion, in order to be a good character, he has to be believable and most importantly: relatable. So think more about deeper things. for example: what does he fear? Is it approval? Fear of losing battle? Being embarrassed in front of people? Is he to proud? Not trustworthy? etc.

Best of luck :)
I hope this reply was useful in some way

ps: I loved the fact that he is colorblind, but think about how he being colorblind affects him? Or does it affect him at all?

Thank you!!