Share your favorite scene!
Started November 24, 2022 by @Nightmare_Eclipse

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@Nightmare_Eclipse

November 24, 2022

There are some scenes that are just too good to not write. What is your favorite scene from your writing?

@Nightmare_Eclipse

November 24, 2022

This is my favorite scene, a conversation between The main character with her boyfriend and the antagonist. It's weird… but it just gets better and better :)

Cooper was in his quarters, eating a very large burrito. His face was covered in a slimy green sauce, and his desk was scattered with various food and drink.
"Oh! Blade, and Marin!" Cooper said, sending spit everywhere. Blade recoiled in disgust. Cooper picked up a very dirty cloth and wiped his face on it, getting the sauce all over the cloth and himself.
Blade and Marin shared looks of annoyance and disgust. Blade tentatively took a step forward. "Um…" she started, trying not to gag.
"I suppose you want me to explain your appointment of becoming the lord and lady of the kingdom, correct?" Cooper said, taking a huge sip of what was probably wine and stuffing the rest of the burrito in his mouth.
Blade was about to speak again when Cooper choked, coughing and spraying chewed burrito bits everywhere. Finally, with one final cough, what remained of the burrito flew out of his mouth and hit Marin in the face.
Marin screeched and ran out, probably searching for a place to wipe his face. Blade stared at Cooper, alarmed.
"Oops," Cooper said, belching. "Sorry." He sounded anything but sorry.
Blade sighed and forced herself to meet Cooper's eyes. "Okay," she said, narrowing her eyes. "Please explain our appointments. Like, now."
Cooper smiled, taking another sip of wine and looking more drunk every second. "You two are my best advisors, so you get to be treated as such! I gave orders to the kingdom to treat you like royalty."
"Oh! Um…" Blade said, surprised. "Okay. So…"
Cooper stood up, stumbling. "Yes! I want another burrito. Someone! Summon my tax collectors and tell them to make me a burrito! And make it cold!" He tripped, hitting a bowl of slimy, red sauce and splattering it all over the ground.
"Gah! Natalie, why did you spill milk all over me again?" he shouted, rolling around. "I need a presentable outfit!" He's drunk, Blade thought, alarmed. She stumbled towards the door.
Cooper reached up and took another long drink of wine, spilling it all over himself in the process. "Oh, hi Blade. Thought you should know, I'm declaring war on the clans next week. Be ready for the presentation!" Then he fell asleep.

@Elder-God-Jacks347

November 24, 2022

It is a scene that only exists in the PMs here

Two rockstars who have been dating in secret and the media thinks they hate each other reveals that they've been dating for 2 (3? I don't remember) years through the song Partners In Crime

I know how cliche and kinda cringe it sounds but on God that was some of my best work

@larcenistarsonist

November 29, 2022

okay i really like how this scene turned out! tw for smoking, implied alcoholism/addiction/sex, and disassociation

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Momentarily, he ponders where Shea and her “gang of miscreants” are doing. Drew blames the less-than-nice name on Paisley, or even Rhyda. Hell, Felix could’ve even used his stupidly smooth voice to form the insult. God. Drew doesn’t like how he can see Felix’s lips smirk around the words, golden eyes narrowing, his hand carding through his hair, and his tongue sweeping over his teeth–

“Shit.” Prisms form behind his eyelids as Drew rubs them raw. Clearly, he’s not over himself nor the assassin yet.

It’s been a year since their one night stand and the memories are seared straight into his mind, burning his night and daydreams ever since. God, does he loathe himself for it.

Agonizingly, Drew gets to his feet and rips open the nightstand drawer. His fingers find the familiar box and snatch them up in tandem with a lighter. Grace would always chastise him for smoking alone in his room, but as much as he loves Grace, he cannot bring himself to care.

The flame sends warm and wavering shadows around the room, the golden embers touching every bit of his monochrome furniture and giving it momentary life.

The fire extinguishes as soon as it fuels the cigarette. The area already smells of sweet tobacco and sweltering smoke.

He takes the first drag as he returns the box and lighter to the drawer, noting the clink of the lighter hits the mostly-empty glass bottle laying within. His tumblers are all dirty and he doesn’t quite have the energy to take swigs straight from the mouth, so he allows the alcohol to sit for tonight.

Wishing there was a window he could dramatically stare out of, Drew faces the wall. His eyes bare glazed into the simple gray paint turned dark in the lightless area. Two fingers clutch his cigarette as he brings it once more to his lips. Inhale. Hold. Exhale.

He doesn’t envy the maid who scrubs the smoke stains from his walls.

He would have to personally thank whoever they are sometime.

A knock on his door jolts him from his stupor. There’s a cigarette butt in the ashtray and a fresh one in his fingers. Drew blinks. The knocks come again.

Drew my beloved <3

@Pepsi-spilled-on-the-pages

January 17, 2023

I think this could be one of my favorite scenes. Its from one of my earlier chapters.

“I see” I got quiet for a moment before Kenzo got closer to me and looked down at the water, ”It’s just that. There’s something special about you Hector. When I first saw you I thought you were a cute guy, roughly around my age. I wanted to get to know you I guess…” I looked away blushing, no one had ever really called me cute, or even took the time to notice me. I looked back at Kenzo, still looking down at the water and blushing.
“Is that why you’re doing all this? Taking care of me and bringing me places?”
“I care… I care about you, Hector. I like you… and… I want to go out with you. If you don’t feel the same way it’s fine, I understand.” It got silent for a moment then he looked up at me, “I just hope you consider my feelings at least…” I felt my face get hot and I nervously diverted my gaze.
“I- I don’t know what to… what to say I-” I took a step back trying to get closer to the shore when a wave knocked me over.
“Hector!” I tried to stand back up but the waves pushed me down.

this happened to me one time. The getting knocked down by a wave part. Never stepped in the ocean again.

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