forum Please critique my short story
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@LaniGirl

So, Tangled basically. No it was good! It gives the vibe of a fantasy start up but it'd be really cool if you spun it around and made her like the leader of a rebellion or really ugly so whatever the Witch is after is lost and she finds another use for the princess.

If this is just a short story on it's own its still pretty good! I love how smooth the writing is, nothing to overcomplicated but it's still an interesting read. If I'm being honest, as it was really short I was sort of expecting a big twist at the end but as mentioned I don't know the criteria of the story.
It's good.