forum Fight scene ?
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@Paperok

Context: A competition where many people fight for the right to be trained by Madam Sureigh so they can slay a powerful dragon. Slaying said dragon gives the warrior a single wish.

“When the sun rises over that mountain,” the man gestured to the largest of a group of mountains to the east of the city. “The match will end and the both of you will be withdrawn from the event, victory is awarded by surrender or death.” Gripping my sword tightly, I approach Royn carefully. He was pacing, entering and leaving the dim torchlight. “Proceed.” Royn lunged, thrusting his sword level with his chest. I sidestepped his lunge and maneuvered away, gaining a few steps between us. Royn lunged a few more times, I repeated my actions keeping a distance from him.

“Stay still,” he shouted, stepping into a wide left swing. I deflected it but i'm knocked off balance by the impact. Royn advanced, recovering from his swing, and swinging wildly. I blocked two strikes and planted my foot squarely in his chest, the hit knocks him back. I caught his wrist and sliced open his forearm. He dropped his sword and clutched his wrist, stumbling backward.

“Give up,” I said, noticing the hint of orange growing over the mountains. “You’ll bleed out,” Royn reached for the sword. “Royn,” I warned. He took it into his left hand and lunged with a roar. I stepped back, Royn swung his right arm, blood splattered on my face as he winced. I knocked the sword out of his hand and smashed the hilt of my weapon into his chin. He staggered and fell onto his back, I approached, aiming my blade at his neck as he reached for his sword.

“Royn!” a girl screamed from the crowd. I looked up for a moment, “please! It’s not worth your life!” Royn kicked my knee and I stumbled as he retrieved his sword. He swung it in a quick, swipe. I parried it and slid my sword down against his cross guard. Royn grabbed my wrist and tried to force me to drop my sword. I twisted free, knocked his sword aside and sliced across his other wrist. He cried out and collapsed onto his knees. The sun was starting to rise, “Royn surrender!” the girl from before shouted. Royn locked eyes with me, he wasn’t going to surrender. I readied my blade and stepped on his as I approached. “Royn please!” I was standing over him, I raised my sword above my head. I take a breath, just like with the deer,

“I surrender,” Royn said. I lowered my sword.

@Yamatsu

Sounds awesome! There's just a few punctuation errors with the girl in the crowd. They should be "Royn, surrender!" and "Royn, please!"

Also, out of curiosity: many people train to fight this dragon, but how many actually live to tell the tale?

@Paperok

Thanks for pointing those out! Only two have defeated the dragon, but part of the way the world works is when you kill someone you inherit their memories. After killing the dragon they wished to take its place. That's why Thomas, the mc, is fighting. He wants to see what they saw that made them do what they did. Royn wanted to get money to get his sister into a higher education. I know you didn't ask but the warriors that inherit the dragon's memories become aware of the 4th Wall which is why they give up on their wish. Thanks for taking your time to look it over! ^^

@Yamatsu

So, "dragon" is a title then? That's SO COOL! I've only ever read one other book series that has that, "A TIme of Dragons" by James A. Owen.