forum Critique my world and plot please!

Started July 28, 2019 by @Relsey

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This is my baby, she has some plot holes, some typos, but if I could get some critiques on the over all thing I would appreciate it.

I meant to comment on this but it slipped my mind soo late reply

Honestly, I don't have anything to critique I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed reading all of this and it seems like a really cool world

Thanks @Reblod!