forum How does this myth sound?
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I'm making this a parallel for two of my characters, so I need it to be decent at the very least. Anyways: Here it is:

"In a small town, there lived a woman named Kalla. She was beautiful, but she was also kind. A joy to all who saw her. One day, her mother grew ill, she died not long after. Her father soon followed, devoid of all joy when his wife was dead. Kalla was left alone.

"The entire town grieved alongside her, and when Saint Jaya came to read a single person's fortune, they allowed her to go. The Saint told her that if she stayed on the edge of the river outside of town, her true love would pick her up and carry her to a fanciful palace, where she would live happily if she did not ask for the person's name or look at the person's face.

The next day, Kalla walked to the river and sat. She waited for hours and hours until a cloaked woman joined her at the bank. They talked for a while until the mysterious woman revealed that she had come to take Kalla to a beautiful place. Kalla agreed to go, trusting the words of the saint.

What she did not know was that the woman was actually Saint Jaya in disguise. The saint had been watching over the town and had taken a liking to Kalla. However, saints were not allowed to take on spouses, so Jaya needed to keep her identity secret.

Jaya and Kalla lived happily for some time. However, Kalla could not keep curiosity from her mind. She wondered what her wife looked like. What it would be like to watch her as they slept together. One day, Jaya fell asleep early and, overcome with curiosity, Kalla removed her wife's hood, revealing the saint's face. She screamed her wife's true name, only to call down the might of The Creator.

Jaya had been missing for several months, and once The Creator saw where she was, they struck her down with Kalla alongside her. With her dying breath, Jaya muttered a spell that would put them in the sky together so that they would be together in death.

The Creator would not allow this. Thet took Kalla and placed her on the eastern half of the sky and put Jaya on the other so that even in death they could not be together. And so, the two lovers were kept forever apart, both by Kalla's curiosity and Jaya's willfulness. Their suffering is a lesson to us: Never disobey the gods.

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Thanks! It kind of does, now that I think about it. Probably subconsciously took inspiration.