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..Yeah

Also, do you guys mind helping me with a short story I have to write for English?

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"I'll be back home by 6 and that room better be unpacked when I get back!" Her mother yelled from downstairs before a door slammed shut.
Brooklyn and her mother had just moved from New York to a small town in Utah. It was drastically different from the bustling city she was used to. She began to calculate in her head if she had woken up around 9 in the morning, she would be able to unpack two to three boxes that were full of items before noon. After that, she could unpack three to four boxes until her mother got home, leaving her with two more boxes, unless, she managed to hide or stuff them in her closet.
Her room was your average room, it was medium size with a lone window on the side and a small walk-in-closet that was still filled with boxes that weren't going away anytime soon if she continued to procrastinate.
Immediately, she got to work and opened her closet doors before moving a box in and started to unpack. However, as she moved her possessions into the closet, she spotted a small box sitting casually on one of the closet shelves. It had a small door open on its side which…was not normal for a box. Curious, she stopped what she was doing and walked over to investigate. Hmm, I wonder what's inside? She thought to herself as she opened the lid of the box.
"Hey, put out roof back on!" A loud voice shouted from within the box.
Startled, Brooklyn looked into the box where a pack of snowglobes seems to be…talking?
Wait, I'm imagining it right? She scolded herself as she tried looking around the closet to see if it was anything else.
"Hey you, yeah you, the girl with the brown hair! Down here!" The loud voice shouted once more. Slowly, she looked down once more, to see the snowglobes still talking, rather excitingly.
I'm getting delusional right?
This was very not normal.
"You-You're- The- You're talking." She stammered, completely speechless by what she saw.
"Of course I'm talking, have you not seen a talking snow globe before?!" A small man asked angrily. He was about 2 inches tall, with monocles, and what looked like a top hat from the 1800s from what she could guess.
"To be fair, snow globes usually don't talk." She replied.
The man huffed and gave her a steady glare. "Are you insinuating that I'm not real?!" He screamed at the top of his tiny lungs which was surprising still loud.
Brooklyn couldn't believe what was happening as she looked down in disbelief. "No, that's…not what I meant." She paused before continuing. "But, what's your name?" She asked
"Dickens, Charle Dickens."

@Crisis

I AM IN DANGER

No what's the situation. Are you holding a sharp object or pills. Are your parents monitoring your searches. Did your sister tell them something

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Does my short story, sound to boring, how can I make it better because I feel like I could.

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Frantically pulls hair. I mean I think it sounds boring, and It sounds like nothing from you guy's stories I mean those are great, and won't the reader's be bored from the first line, I mean it sounds like one of those boring stories from my literature book, so wouldn't people not like it?

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Try and massage it sol

also how does this opening line sound?

Never in my life have I ever wanted to tell my neighbors to shut up.