forum Dying! At the dinner table. BAND MEMBERS ONLY!
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Deleted user

Hey would it be cool if you or girl who lived could sing some runs?

Deleted user

Actually I take it back, its great we just need to add in some more verses.

Deleted user

You can sing the first part, the girl who lived can sing the second, ummmm I might rap the rap or sly can and then you both can duet for the last part.

Deleted user

I push my chair away
Don't let my mind stray away
Anyway
I don't think anyone understands
I cannot bear those little green strands

(idk…)

Deleted user

Ok then sly you do the rap because I rap like your grandmother.

Deleted user

I push my chair away
Don't let my mind stray away
Anyway
I don't think anyone understands
I cannot bear those little green strands

(idk…)

Ok can we not make this like asparagus because well no.

Deleted user

Because I don't want to make the entire song about asparagus like there are other foods too.

Deleted user

ALRIGHTY THEN

I search the cabinets once more
What was it that I was lookin for?

My eyes wander to the top
I suddenly stop
Is that an Ice pop?

Deleted user

I don't think all three of those lines should rhyme.

Deleted user

I don't know, I'm not really the expert so might as well give some advice.

Deleted user

How about and this is just an idea

we write the whole song before editing it or critiquing?

Deleted user

I'm definitely not an expert, but I've been writing for years now. It may be a small thing but it sounds a little off to me. But that's only my opinion.

Deleted user

Yeah that makes sense, I'm just not used to working like that. Sorry.