I'm looking for someone that's willing to critique a gore-ish story that I've been working on. I want you to critique each chapter, and then the piece as a whole (well, at least everything that I have wrote so far). I'm also gonna ask that you analize one of the characters.
Lol this is super late but I will XD
:-) Here's the story. https://www.wattpad.com/story/13025453-winchester-high-there-will-be-blood The character that I want you to analyze is Clownface. I've been having some issues filling out his character profile. https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/384865#
Okay so um…here's the thing. I'm on my school computer and wattpad is blocked, so I can't access the story. I like the character, let me look at him a lil more though.
Perhaps this will help then. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1C0GXCWSW77FBN8Aj1BNcuCWWEpx-hOr9weIyXdFbmF0/edit?usp=drivesdk
I'm having trouble filling out his character sheet. I usually don't do character sheets, and just write, going with the flow.
Hm, I requested access to the doc. I'll read it when I can!
You should have access to it now.
You may critique each chapter as you go, if you want.
Okay. I'm sorry I take a while.
If you want I can also run it through Grammarly.
Just make suggestions. I'll get around to them.
Mkay
I think the first thing I notice is there are multiple places where commas are but shouldn't be.
Ex:
I swing my feet over the bed, and slowly stand up.
This should be:
I swing my feet over the bed and slowly stand up.
Ok. I'll work on fixing that.
There are also some places where there aren't commas where there should be but that's not as noticable.
Give me some updates….
I honestly haven't been able to read much more..I will by the end of the day
May I? I'm not sure if I can access Wattpad, so try WP and maybe Google.
Absolutely!
I'm focusing on writing before I edit/revise, so please keep that in mind…. Links to Wattpad and Google have already been provided, as has the link to my character-page.
Alright!
I'll try not to point out any writing mistakes, as I dislike when people point out only grammar and don't appreciate the story.
here goes!
So, turns out that BOTH of those are a "privacy error" on my laptop, because my dad blocked everything basically except the fun stuff. So…
If it's not too long, maybe you can copy-paste it into a private message.
in you're into gore, check 'ways to kill people using telekenesis' in the magic section
Summoning @Caustic-Fraust-Is-Beab because I think you'll enjoy this!