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"I am going to hell" I muttered to myself as I picked my jeans up off the floor. I threw them on the bed and walked to the door to close it, but I heard a familiar giggle that was in my ear last night. I looked out into the hallway and saw Asha with ared head and blonde getting on to the elevator. Asha was blushing while the other to were screaming happily in her ear not giving a fuck about her ear drums.

I closed the door, and went back my suitcase and pulled out my laptop and put it on the table where Asha and I just had breakfast. I opened the laptop lid and turned it back on.

As I waited for that I decided, or my body decided, that it was time for more coffee. I walked back to the cart and picked up the coffee pot and poured it into my coffee cup it used earlier. As I filled it to the rim, my phone started to ring. I put the coffee pot down and picked my phone up from the table stand, I saw who it was and rolled my eyes. Veronica. I declined the called and sent her a text.

To Vee: Stop calling me, I'm serious this time. Do not call text or contact me in anyway. LEAVE ME THE HELL ALONE!!!!

And then I deleted the phone number, after I locked my phone my laptop chimed. I walked back to my laptop and saw aface time notification from my youngest sister Bailey. I accepted the call and smiled seeing my sisters and brother on the other side.

"When are you coming back home?" Bailey asked me quickly.

"I'll be home tonight I promise babe." I told her, she looked content with my answer and waved goodbye leaving her phone with the twins. Why did I give her that she's seven?

They sat there and stared at me. "What?" I asked them. "Is that a sign that there's a gun to your head?"

"Jeremiah had a girl over last night." Fi smirked andher boy version look alike rolled his eyes.

"First off all we were studying, in the living room with Bailey watching, I don't know the fucking wiggles. It was PG, hell G." Jeremiah explained to me. "It was all math, math, math with her."

"As in Alexa your tutor, who kindly offered to tutor you for free?" I asked fascinatedly. “First off all Fi, your brother doesn’t have a shot with Alexa Goldman, she’s a volleyball player with straight A’s. And he plays guitar in his room and makes C’s.”

Fiona laughed and shook her head. "How was your first day of school?" I asked them.

"It was eh, I guess?" Fiona answered looking down at her phone. "Oh I got a job." She shouted excitedly with smile on her face.

"Really? When did you apply?" I asked curiously.

"A few months ago for the summer but the were all book on employees. One just quit so the manager said thay Icould work weekends, so it wouldn't interfere with my school work." She explained to happily. "Now I don't have to keep asking you for money, I'll have my own soon and then I can move out and live with daddy."

"Yeah, Fi. You do that." I smiled for encouragement. I was proud thay she went out there and got a job, also one that could work around her school schedule. My eyes darted to Jeremiah to see him looking at I'm assuming the tv. "And you Jeremiah?"

"Nope, I'm still taking your money. I like it here." He answer with a devilish smirk. I looked at the time and it was getting close to 10:00.

"Look, I have ameeting to get to and then I'll be on my way home possibly before dinner alright." I told them as I waved goodbye. They said bye and I exited the face time app.

I opened my email and saw a new message from Clementine my lawyer. I opened the message and saw that it was telling me about anew assistant.

So apparently my current assistant just had a baby out if nowhere and wants to stay home with the kid. Well one congrats Skylar and Dylan, and two fuck you for leaving me with a new assistant.

Skylar knew everything before I asked for it. Knew the way I liked my coffee, how to properly clean the community fridge without being asked. That wasn't even a part of his job description yet he did it anyway, he also picked Bailey and the twins up from school if I couldn't. You know all two of the times I asked.

All the email said was; forgot her name but she is pretty. She is eighteen and her last name is Peters. College graduate with a bachelors and apparently is a super genius. Graduated high school when she was fourteen and moved on to college.

And you now have a nameless Assistant who is better than you. ;P

Ps how was your date??

And I replied: Shut Up.

I want to extend this scene a little more but I'm not sure how, any ideas?

Corrinne

Maybe extend the email between the two characters that were conversing in the last scene. If you wanted to develop their relationship for later in the book, this would be a great way to do it. If not, then have the main character email Peters and ask her to be his or her assistant. That would be a good way to set up a relationship between those to characters as well. You could also tell how the employer feels about Peters. Is she/he attracted to her or jealous of her? Does she/he hate Peters or do they get along? This is the perfect time to further elaborate the relationships between the characters.