So, in my story, it's a father who is obsessed with keeping his twelve year old daughter safe, because his wife died. He struggles between being a good father, and letting his grief take over. I don't know if that should be the actual crisis, but I would like suggestions if that seems boring. Oh, and he's a master magician. :)
This is a good concept but is that the only aspect of the story? Is the daughter trying to be more independent or are they in a situation where being a good dad is hard? What does his grief cause him to do? This is a good idea, I just feel like it needs a bit of elaboration and development.
Thank you for your commentary! And yes, she is trying to be more independent. And the father is afraid that if he lets his grief take over, he'll give up and lose himself in some pub or with some other woman, and be worthless to his daughter.
That definitely helps me understand the situation more. How do you plan to incorporate the magician thing? (If at all.)
Well, thats his career. It was he and his wife, and it's what he loves doing.
That's interesting, I like that you included that little detail, it give the story more character in my opinion.
Did his wife die while on the job? Maybe if his daughter is trying to be more independent by following her dream of being a magician like her mother then that can be a huge grief and overprotectiveness trigger for the dad. He can try to stop her and it can make her mad or something because she doesn't understand the reason behind him not wanting her to become a magician. Maybe she doesn't know how her mom died or she has ben told some sort of lie about it and so she thinks he's trying to stop her from being a magician because she's not good enough when really he just doesn't want her to die like her mother. Or something. Did that make any sense? I don't think that made any sense. Oops. In any case, good luck with your story!