I would love some critiques on my boys and hopefully, they're not too bad. You also don't have to critique all of them, just do as many as you'd like! Thank you in advance!
Cole: Cole Granger
Hunter: Hunter Granger
Seth: Seth Reed
Tristan: Tristan Bowyer
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I'm just going to start by critiquing Cole. I'll come back and do the others later.
First, you say he has a "softer side." It would help to specify what you mean by that.
Next, not a critique, but just a question. You put his religion as "Light Being Worship," and I know you've probably planned it out, but I'm curious. What is it?
That's really all I have, but I would like to learn some things about the story your characters are in, if you've got one.
For Seth, I think it's a little weird for him to go from extroverted to introverted. Maybe going from friendly to very reserved would make more sense. I also think you should include what he wants revenge for under motivations. Finally, how did he get his scars?
@Becfromthedead
Thank you!
He has a sweet side that they open up. (I did change it btw)
Here's a link to the page I have for it: The Children of Savian. It might not be the best but I think it explains what it needs to, for now at least.
I'm still figuring the story out!
Okay, that's all great! I'll go back in and read that in a moment.
For Tristan, was there one specific event that caused his change in personality/heart?
Another thing for all of the characters is this: prejudice refers more to hatred or uncertainty towards a certain thing or a certain group based on a specific characteristic, and it seems a little misused in your profiles. That's honestly one of the hardest fields to fill out, though.
For Hunter, other than the critique I'm giving for all of your characters, I don't have anything else to say.
Oh, so it's somewhat like spirit worship?
Oh, so it's somewhat like spirit worship?
Yeah? Hopefully, I'll get better at explaining it.
For Seth, I think it's a little weird for him to go from extroverted to introverted. Maybe going from friendly to very reserved would make more sense. I also think you should include what he wants revenge for under motivations. Finally, how did he get his scars?
Fixed those 2 things! As for the last, it'll be revealed in my story!
Okay, that's all great! I'll go back in and read that in a moment.
For Tristan, was there one specific event that caused his change in personality/heart?
Another thing for all of the characters is this: prejudice refers more to hatred or uncertainty towards a certain thing or a certain group based on a specific characteristic, and it seems a little misused in your profiles. That's honestly one of the hardest fields to fill out, though.
For Hunter, other than the critique I'm giving for all of your characters, I don't have anything else to say.
Yes, it'll also be revealed in my story!
I think I fixed the worse ones.
I hope that's a good thing!
Yeah, that's a good thing! I hope all of that helped!
@Becfromthedead
Ok good lol
It did, thank you!