Hi, I'm new to Notebook.ai and would like someone (anyone really) to help me with my characters. I should be developing them more as I go along, but if someone could help me with making them more realistic, it would be really helpful!
Hi!! A great way to get character help is to post them and let others give you constructive criticism. I've done it before and it is SO helpful. If you want to put anyone on this thread, I would be happy to help!
Thanks, what do you think of this one? Xavier James Agen
I think your character is on private–if you could make them public, I'll check them out!
right, how would I go about making them public?
So when you go to the character (just click on their name), there's this little three-dot-triangle symbol things. Click on that, flip the character's name to 'public,' and copy the link. :D
Hi! Welcome! I'm fairly new too ^-^ but i'd be glad to help you with your characters!
Okee dokee, hopefully this will work now! Xavier James Agen
Ok! I'm just gonna go from the top down…
-Name's not too crazy, which is definitely an immediate plus
-He sounds adorable–one thing under looks. For race, you put white, which totally makes sense, but I think if you were to put 'German' or 'French' it just adds a little extra depth.
-PERFECT mannerisms. They just seem so real! Just a couple things under this page… First, you listed a motivation of protecting his friends, which is awesome, but then you also list dependence under his flaws. This probably plays out just fine, but on paper it kind of contradicts itself. I think that his prejudices provide an interesting window to what might turn out to be a darker side.
-Woop, we're fantasy! I think so, anyway–I saw 'sword' and just kind of assumed
-Give! Me! More! Backstory! The way it's worded here makes it seem as if he had a bad relationship with his mother. Elaborate on that! Tell me more about Michael and how close they were. Tell me what his mission is! Background is pretty solid, but I would love to hear a bit more about how he ended up doing whatever he does in your story. I'm thinking that's a big deal, since he's listed as a main character.
-I love cats. Cats are awesome. We should all have cats.
All right! That was mostly constructive criticism, but here's my overall: This is definitely a good character. His mannerisms and personality make him seem super believable, not just a guy on paper. Like, I feel like I could run into this guy and just chill with him. That's hard. I struggle making my characters actually seem human. Honestly, with a touch more in the backstory, I think you've got a really solid character here.
I really hope this helps!! :P
Thanks sooooooo much! I'll work on it and show you the improved product. Of course, if you want any help in return I'd be happy to lend a hand! :)
Of course!! I actually just posted a character under a separate thread, so if you want to check her out, that would be awesome!