forum Help make my OC better?
Started by @Paxi_The_Penguin
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@Celestial-B

Ok! I'll go now!

First, she is a tiny bit underweight, but not by much! You don't specifically mention that she is underweight so i'm assuming she's not. The average weight for someone her height is around 125-155 lbs, but its by so little I don't think it would matter if you left it or not! How long is her hair? You say its wavy, but not how long it is. Is it to her shoulders? Elbows? Lower back? Somewhere else? Ok, so her mannerisms aren't exactly mannerisms, don't feel bad, plenty of people i've critiqued before don't know what a mannerism is. A mannerism is 'a habitual gesture or way of speaking or behaving.' So for example, 'bites her lip when lying' or 'mumbles when annoyed' would be some! Her motivation is kind of confusing. How does being friends with many famous people make her motivated? I'm curious about that! Her flaws are kind of bare. Really, you only gave her two flaws. I guess hating being called cute isn't really a flaw, but anxiety is and I guess sensory could be. Give her more! Here is a website I like to use when I give my characters flaws! – https://writerswrite.co.za/123-ideas-for-character-flaws/. It really helps me a lot!! I don't think believing in God would be a prejudice. A prejudice is 'a preconceived opinion that is not based on any reason or actual experience. So for instance, thinking a certain race is bad would be one, or thinking everything that taste like chocolate is nasty lol. Those would be prejudices! Her background is pretty bare. It doesn't tell me much about her as a person like a background should. Why was she put into a orphanage? Did her parents not want her? Could they not take care of her? Did she have any siblings? Any close friends or pets? How long has she been in the orphanage? Did something happen to her in her childhood that made her the way she is? Who is Lin Manuel Miranda? Did she want to be adopted or did she like the orphanage? Anyways, those are just some of the questions I could think of right now!

Good luck with the character and hope I helped!

@Paxi_The_Penguin

OMG thanks to much this helps a lot!!!😁😁

Btw i don’t know If you want me to answer these questions for you or just write them down for my character. But yeah, thanks for all the help!