forum How to give my writing more flavor

Started August 17, 2020 by @LilMeme group

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I just finished writing the draft for one of my lores and looking over, the writing seem boring and tedious, any tips The Kami Game

Honestly, the lore itself looked pretty good- it's definitely an incredibly interesting concept, and I would probably open a book if this (or something similar) was the blurb on the back. I have just two tips:

• I would give just a few more details about the lives of the woman and her lover to get us a little more invested in where there story is going to go
• You used the word 'herself' twice in the last sentence- I know this isn't a 'flavor tip', sorry!!

Ok, thanks for your suggestions

Np! Good luck (:

ah, I just took a quick glance, but one way I noticed that you could easily add flavour is by being ruthless about tenses! You switch quite frequently between past, present and conditional, so nailing it down to one of them would make the writing immediately more clear and consistent.