forum Critique my gal please?
Started by @Jolyn
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@nachthexe

I loved your character, and I am usually very critical, always paying attention to the smallest of details and finding mistakes in everything, pointing out every single flaw. Yet, I had a very hard time finding wrong things in your character! I loved how her anxiety disorder is perceptible all throughout the description of your character, and it was not just something you put to make her look “cooler” or something. Like, when you first described her mannerisms and you said she nibbles at the skin below her nails, the first thing I thought was “that’s anxiety right there!”, and it really was! It makes perfect sense for her to have anxiety as well, like so many people these days develop, I loved how you treated the subject, especially as I’m someone with GAD as well, and I felt well represented within that part of your character. Her story and backstory are very well thought as well, and her personality matches her perfectly! You managed to make a hero that isn’t a Sue, yet isn’t bland as well!

@Jolyn

Ahh thank you so much! It’s happy to know she isn’t coming off as a Sue and even happier to know you feel represented! It’s one of my biggest concerns when I’m writing any and all characters especially who have any mental health issues. Pike I was most nervous about to get critiqued since she’s so complex in my head when it comes to her mental health so good to know she was well received!