forum please help me with some first sentence/ dialogue prompts? :)
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hi I'm Frances; and I'm having a bit of trouble writing the first sentence of my story titled; The Blue People of Osmond City. i already have bits and pieces that will make up the first chapter, and a basic list of characters that i plan on using. i always have this problem with starting a writing piece and usually ask my family for a few random words, but rn i can't seem to get it.
My story takes place in the '90s & is about this small city on the outskirts of nyc that holds a tight-knit underground mafia-like hub that basically manages a large majority of organized crime in the surrounding cities. The main characters are the children of caporegimes (mini-bosses) of their own respective cities. The first setting is in Osmond City, and two boys (kids of the mob) are abt 9 and best friends (everyone is basically family). Something happens and the father of one boy, (Murphy Redding is the kids name) is killed, and the boys mother is taking him away from the city, back to Boston. Years pass, blah blah, and after numerous secret letters between the two, Murphy finds out that his best friend (Fowler Andreini) had been killed, and he goes back to Osmond City, even though his mom told him they weren't allowed back. (Turns out that was a lie) He tries to investigate the death of his boyfriend and find out what happens/ who he has to kill etc &reconnect with a few other friends. In the end, it turns out Fowler isn't dead and they're reunited, but then,,,, a gunshot, a bullet casing clattering, and both of them are wide-eyed.(º_º)
So…yes, i need help with the first sentence. (Please) Anything would help, actually,;; dialogue bits, a line of poetry¿ anything. Please don't steal this idea– I've worked very hard (made a pinterest, playlist n everythin)

If I should give any more names/ context please tell me, but otherwise ;/ (hopefully this doesn't get buried)

                                           thanks:) have a nice day

@RaysofSun

(Do you still need help? I know it's been a while since you posted this, but I could probably come up with something if you need it?)

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(Do you still need help? I know it's been a while since you posted this, but I could probably come up with something if you need it?)

(Woww, i forgot abt this post, I have definitely made some progress regarding my story and have done a lot of plot building. Any bits and pieces, dialogue, actions, memories even, that I could incorporate into my work to make it feel more real, would be really appreciated, thank you :)